A shift is needed…


As I mentioned in my post about the point of view I’ve chosen for this story, I’m using flashbacks to tell parts of it.  The meat of the story is written in first person, and it follows what Matt is doing as the plot unfolds.  However, scattered throughout the novel are chapters that are set in the past.  I have chosen to make these flashback scenes in third person point of view.

I have liked how these flashback scenes have gone so far.  As the plot of Matt confiding in his friend Jordy about being a vampire struggling to live, and a killer who everyone thinks is Matt, progresses, the story will slip into a flashback to show bits of relevant information about Matt and his life as a vampire.  The first few flashbacks deal with Matt getting bit, him turning, and figuring out he’s a vampire.  Others have dealt with him discovering what he can and can’t do as a vampire.  Still others deal with him meeting other characters and learning how vampire society works.

Today, however, I wrote an unplanned flashback.  In it, I showed Matt doing the only job he loved and was good at doing since he was turned into a vampire.  This flashback was set only a year prior to the story’s beginning, and it showed Matt working as the nighttime babysitter of the two children of rich, workaholic parents.  The children, Jenna (age 5) and Ryan (age 3), like Matt a lot, and he discovered that he’s actually good at babysitting.  For the first time since he became a vampire, he had found a job he could do despite his condition, he enjoyed doing, and was actually good at.  The job paid enough that he could start saving some extra cash.

But Matt’s happiness couldn’t last.  He got fired.  Not because he did something wrong, or because he wasn’t getting along with the kids, but rather because Mr. Nessin was angry and Matt was in the way.  You see, Mr. Neesin found out his wife was having an affair with his co-worker, and Mrs. Nessin found out that he was having an affair with another woman.  This lead to an argument and the promise of divorce.  Mr. Nessin arrived home to find Matt with the well cared for kids, but his temper was high and told Matt to leave.

Matt had to say goodbye to young Jenna as he watched her cry over him leaving.  It broke his heart to see Jenna’s eyes full of tears as she begged him not to go.  He knew he couldn’t face that again, and so babysitting, a job he was good at, became something he was unwilling to do.

This is my favorite flashback so far.  It was heartbreaking to write, but I think it adds a whole new level to the story and to my main character.

Current word count for Struggles of a Modern Vampire: 53,546/50,000!

Until we meet again,

Andrew Ronzino, The Jerkface


Comments on: "NaNoWriMo Day 17: The Flashbacks" (2)

  1. […] excerpt is from the scene I wrote yesterday, the one where Matt had to say goodbye to Jenna.  Thus far, it’s my favorite part of the story, and I wanted to share it with you.  Please […]

  2. […] in NaNoWriMo and would I would like to spend them by adding a little more detail here and there in flashback scenes.  So, though the meat of the novel is done, I’m going to insert some more substance to […]

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