A shift is needed…

NaNoWriMo Jounrnal 2014

A month has gone by and I wrote over 83,000 words in less than 30 days.  I’m take such satisfaction from that.

There were some curves in the road, and I ended up changing a lot of things from my original timeline of events, but I believe that it was for the best.  I think the story turned out better than I thought it was going to.

It may be over, but I’m not done writing.  I still have a novel that I’m trying to get polished for publication, as well as new stories that come to mind that I jot down.  Next year, the madness that is NaNoWriMo will begin again with a brand new story.  I don’t know what it is yet, but I know I’ll think of something.

With it being the last day, normally I just have my final thoughts, but I never got to put up the last character progression, so here it is!

Jim Kleverland (Primary Antagonist):

Dr. Jim Kleverland is a medical doctor and a clockwork engineer.  He invented clockwork prosthetics and is considered to be brilliant both in the fields of medicine and clockwork.  He started Kleverland Medical, the first and only real medical clockwork company.  He serves as the antagonist of the story.  If you wish to read his introduction from my 2013 NaNoWriMo journal, click here.

Deus Ex Machina

In Deus Ex Machina, Dr. Jim Kleverland is merely mentioned and never seen.  Saul Deus learns that his father, George, tried to make a True Automaton and that he commissioned Dr. Kleverland to make the clockwork heart to help it function.  The Black Cats serve at the antagonist in this first novel.

The Clockwork Heartbeat

In The Clockwork Heartbeat, Jim is working in Boston when he’s contacted by Saul Deus, asking about the heart his father had commissioned to be made.  Jim had made it long ago, and when George Deus passed away, he just held on to the clockwork heart in case he ever needed it for something.  When Jim meets with Saul, he agrees to bring the heart to New York, but Saul would have to show him what his technology is being used in.  Reluctantly, Deus agrees.

When he sees the True Automaton, and they test out the heart, he’s amazed when it comes to life.  He, along with Saul, Tanya, Xandria, and Jill, test out the Automaton and deem him alive.  Jill names him Sam.  Kleverland convinces Saul to shut Sam down for a while and let things settle down between England and Germany before they reveal Sam to the world.

However, Jim is secretly working as an informant for the Germans, and had been since before George Deus ever commissioned him to built the heart.  Jim believes that the world is sick, and he will do anything to heal it.  He would do anything to heal anyone, even his worst enemy.  He believes the German Empire would heal the world.  When he sees the True Automaton, he sees it as an opportunity for Germany to create an army of clockwork men, which would be unstoppable; they could take over and heal the world.  Jim is secretly ordered to take Sam Deus to Germany.

Jim has to wait until everything was ready and Saul was out of town to he can take Sam.  When conditions were perfect, and Saul was gone, he convinced Jill to give him the key to the secret workroom where Sam is being held so that he and his team of Black Cats can steal it.  Jill trusts Jim because Saul does and hands over the key.  When Jim get’s everything prepared and heads into the store, Saul is waiting for him, as he had figured out that Jim was a traitor and going to steal Sam for Germany.  Saul fights Jim with a sword, which Jim is a master of, and Jim promptly cuts off Saul’s left hand.

Instead of leaving Saul to die, he orders his men to get Sam, and he takes Saul to a makeshift operating room, where he saves Saul’s life and gives him one of his Kleverland Medical clockwork hands to replace it.  He makes his escape with Sam.

True Automaton

In True Automaton, the Great War has begun, and Jim Kleverland is in Germany trying to get Sam to cooperate so they can train him to be a solider and fight in the war on their side.  Jim also started manufacturing the shells of other Deus style True Automatons, that Sam can train after they teach him.  Jim didn’t work on the hearts and brains yet though, which he will do once Sam is proven to be effective.  But Sam is refusing to do anything but stand there, and there’s no way to force him to do anything.  Jim, who’s working with Colonel Fenstermancher, the leader of the base he’s staying at, convinces Fenstermancher to allow him to bring in someone who can help train Sam, someone who Sam will listen to.

On Jim’s orders, the Black Cats kidnap Jill Trueheart and bring her to Germany.  Jim threatens to kill her family and friends if she doesn’t help, and that’s enough to convince Jill.  With Jill’s help, Sam begins to learn how to fight.

Many weeks later, Jim learns that Saul, Tanya, and Xandria had come into Germany to rescue Jill, and Jim meets with him after a week or two of Saul’s being mistreated.  He tells Saul that this Great War will heal the world, and he’s willing to do anything to heal the world.

One night, word gets to Jim that Sam helped Jill, Saul, and the women to escape.  He rushes off to bring them back.  He had witnessed first hand how well Sam had been trained and how much he had learned, so he knew he couldn’t fight Sam.  So when he catches up to the escaping group, he shoots Xandria in the back.  This halts the group.  Sam wants to kill Jim, but Jim threatens to kill Saul.  Jim can’t finish the army without Sam, so he tries to convince the group to return, but they refuse.  Jill starts running her mouth, and just because he hates her, Jim shoots her too.  Saul demands that Jim help save their lives, but Jim refuses, saying that things had changed, he wouldn’t heal his enemies anymore.

Then Sam shoots Kleverland in the head when he’s arguing with Saul, allowing the group to escape Germany.


There you have it.  Unlike all the others, where the stuff is somewhat vague because I wasn’t finished yet, this one is complete.  I wanted you to see the full development of Jim Kleverland.  I hope you enjoyed that.

Until next year or until my next blog post,

Andrew Ronzino, a Writer


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