A shift is needed….

NaNoWriMo Day 26: Victory!

On November 1st, I started on a journey to write a novel in 30 days.  26 days have gone by since then, and what started as a simple story of a clockwork engineer has turned into the vomit draft of a full length steampunk novel!  50,000 words was the number to hit, and I not only hit it, but passed it.  Readers of The Paradigm, I have written a novel in under 30 days!

I declare this year’s NaNoWriMo a complete victory!

Deus Ex Machina is finished, it’s only a rough draft, but at least it’s written down.  It was difficult at times; I hit some rough patches and had to push through some problems, but I pulled through, thanks to my family, friends, and my readers.  Thank you for all the encouragement!  And look, I have this year’s winner’s certificate:

I’m very happy with this year’s NaNoWriMo.  I’ve enjoyed writing the novel, and I believe that I have gained some experience from doing so.  There are still a few days of NaNo left, and my journal will be continuing.  I’ll have the final excerpt for you to read, and I would like to explain my plans for Deus Ex Machina in the future, so keep an eye out for that.  I may also use these last few days as time to go back through the novel and start fixing it up a bit, so by the time December 1st rolls around, the stats below may be out of date, we shall see.

The Stats for Deus Ex Machina

Here are the final stats on my 2012 NaNoWriMo project:

Title: Deus Ex Machina

Words: 63,641

Chapters: 35

Pages: 192 (that’s in Open Office, double spaced, 12 point New Times Roman font)

Again, I want to thank everyone who encouraged me through this month, and to all my readers, thank you for hanging in there!

Until next time,

Andrew Ronzino, A Guy Who Wrote a Novel in Under 30 Days

NaNoWriMo Day 25: POV

I’m so close to the end I can taste it!  I don’t have much more to write, so I’m anticipating that I’ll be finished with the novel tomorrow, no promises though, there’s always the chance that I may write more.  But the end is near, of that I’m certain.

I would like to use this entry to discuss the point of view of Deus Ex Machina.  Like I’ve said before, I like to use NaNoWriMo as a way to challenge myself in my writing.  So, I try to do different things than normal.  This year, I tried a different sub-genre of science fiction that I don’t normally write, steampunk.  It’s been great so far, and I dare say I like writing it, and I’m going to keep trying it in the future.  Last year, I tried something different with point of view, but this year I went back to my favored POV for stories.

Personally, my favorite type of point of view is multiple third person, both to read and write.  I like the options that third person offers, especially when you can get more than one viewpoint character in.  Now, there’s a major difference between multiple third person, omniscient, and “head hopping”.  Head hopping is poor technique and can be quite confusing with random switches of viewpoint character with no rhyme or reason…within the same chapter.  However, when the viewpoint character is switched from time to time, and at the right moments (often at a chapter change or a good page break), it can be a fantastic POV.  And it remains my favorite POV to use, and the one I have chosen for this novel.

I considered using first person, and even third person limited (like I did last year with Written in Silence), but after much thought, I chose to go with multiple third person for this story.  I think it works best for it.

There are three viewpoint characters in Deus Ex Machina.  Saul is the protagonist, so he gets most of the novel to himself, however, from time to time, I switch it to either Xandria or Tanya to get their take on the events, or to show their feelings.  I think getting their view on things really adds to the story.

It’s been a growing experience even though it’s a POV I’m familiar with.  I’ve been finding it hard to decide when it’s necessary to switch between Saul, Xandria, and Tanya.  So far, I’ve been satisfied with the way it’s turned out.

Current word count for Deus Ex Machina: 62,511/50,000!

Until (hopefully) victory,

Andrew Ronzino, Batman

I have some news, today I reached 60,000 words!  I’ve gotten a lot farther than I expected to, so I’m very happy.

I would like to go into some details on the antagonists of Deus Ex Machina.  I’ve already talked about Saul, Xandria, Tanya, and a bit about the surprise group of villains, the Black Cats, but I have yet to talk about the British up to this point.  This year, I’m doing something a little different.  The character of Saul Deus is a bit racist, he hates British people.  Because of that, he views them as the bad guys, but as the story goes on, it comes out that their intentions may be good, despite their actions, and that the Black Cats, who work for Germany, are the real villains.  However, it’s not that black and white.  Both England and Germany want any information that Saul has on a True Automaton, but they take different routs to get it.  So, there is no clear “bad guy” in this story, because Saul doesn’t know if the so called “antagonists” of the story are telling the truth or not.  Let me tell you about them….

Wittman & Eastwin

Francis Wittman and Charles Eastwin are representatives of the crown of England, his royal highness, King George.  On orders of the king, Wittman and Eastwin have come to America to speak to Saul Deus and learn everything he knows about George Deus’ (Saul’s father) work on the mythical True Automaton.  As it turns out, the king prior to George, King Edward, paid George Deus a lot of money to create a True Automaton, but three years after being commissioned, Mr. Deus canceled the job after hearing why England wanted one.  Eventually Mr. Deus died, and so did King Edward.  King George remembered the commission, and wanted everything that he thinks belongs to him, in other words, everything related to the True Automaton that George Deus was building.

As the story goes on, we find out that war had been brewing between Germany and England, and Wittman and Eastwin tell Saul that because of this war, George Deus was commissioned to build the True Automaton to help protect England from German attack.  However, Germany also wants the True Automaton, so they send the Black Cats after the same information.

Germany will do anything to possess the information

England is being noble about it, but intends to get their hands on it no matter what.

Eastwin is a short, skinny man with a pencil thin mustache, a fine suit, and a bowler hat.  He is very serious and doesn’t like to joke around.  Wittman is a tall, large man with a clean shaven face, a fine suit, and a bowler hat.  He’s a little more jolly than his partner, but he can be threatening when he needs to be.  He has a phlegmy sort of a voice, and often has trouble getting out of his seat.

They seem to be willing to steal information, but not put Saul Deus’ life in danger to acquire the information they seek.  Some goons that the Brits (as Saul likes to call them, no offense to any British people) hired to look for a key in Saul’s house, kidnaps Saul and Xandria.  The British men let them go after talking to them for a bit, explaining that the thugs weren’t supposed to kidnap them, but rather steal the key and leave.  Eventually, Saul begins to believe that the crown of England wants him alive for some reason that is unknown to him.

Saul is left to wonder if Wittman and Eastwin are being truthful, or if they’re lying.  He can’t figure it out.  In his mind, they are the villains simply because they’re British, but are they really?  Is Germany the real villains here?  Or is England just better at hiding their true plans?

* * *

Wittman and Eastwin are meant to be the faces of England in this story, and no one, especially Saul Deus, is sure whether or not they are sincere.  I purposely keep the true antagonist vague, I think it adds to the story knowing that there are two groups of people after the information Saul has.  Wittman and Eastwin are fun characters, and I’ve enjoyed every scene they’re in.

Current word count for Deus Ex Machina: 60,432/50,000!

Until next evening,

Andrew Ronzino, A Guy Who Does Not Hate British People

Today was Black Friday and I had the day off of work, so it would seem like I had all day to write, but I also had planned a good, long RPG session with some friends, so I had to get my writing done early.  I wrote more than I intended to, and I was very happy with the results.  I had to write a very pivotal point of the story, the description of a True Automaton…or at least the shell of one.

It was a lot of fun to describe what a steampunk android looks like and how it could possibly function.  I had to throw in some rich detail that I’m not used to using.  Describing things in a steampunk setting is harder than it seems, at least with me.  Because, even though it’s sci-fi, one must present a believable world.  A world that, though it’s unrealistic by design, the reader can suspend their disbelief and get into the story.

Tomorrow I will need to finish out the scene and hopefully it will have a great impact on the end of the story.  I’ve been working on punching it up as of late, so I’m really excited to see how it turns out.

Current word count for Deus Ex Machina: 58,403/50,000!

Until next time,

Andrew Ronzino, Automaton Builder

NaNoWriMo Day 22: Thankful

Happy Thanksgiving!

Here’s a list of things I’m thankful for:

  • Salvation
  • Family
  • Food
  • Friends
  • Friends with food
  • The Paradigm’s readers
  • NaNoWriMo
  • More food
  • Writing
  • Acting
  • Reading
  • Books
  • The Bible
  • Deus Ex Machina
  • Steampunk
  • Superman
  • The Grinch
  • This video
  • Parades
  • The Protectors
  • The ancient Romans
  • The Three Stars: Stargate, Star Wars, and Star Trek
  • The unknown
  • Role playing games
  • The Hobbit on IMAX 3D
  • Doug Walker
  • The Secret of NIMH
  • Harry Potter
  • His Dark Materials
  • A Song of Ice and Fire
  • Ted Dekker
  • Wine
  • Extra virgin olive oil
  • The Eight Dimensions Trilogy
  • That one dude you never wanted to see again…but you did anyway
  • Movies
  • Pumpkin pie
  • Facebook
  • My NEW Wrimo friends
  • Nostalgic kids movies from the 80′s and 90′s
  • iPhone
  • The Ronziphone™
  • WordPress
  • Love
  • The agent and publisher I will one day have

I’m thankful for a lot more things as well, but that’s a good list to start with.  I used today as a day off, so I didn’t get any writing done.  I may do a little writing tomorrow.  Excited!

And because it’s Thanksgiving, I’ll leave you with this truly awful song:

Current word count for Deus Ex Machina: 56,114/50,000!

Until tomorrow,

Andrew Ronzino, A Thankful Man

Before I began NaNoWriMo this year, I had a long timeline of events that I planned to follow for my novel.  So far, I have done that.  However, if you were to compare the timeline of events at the beginning of November to what I have written in the actual novel, you would find a lot of major differences (*Salutes* Major Differences…sorry, I had to).

Though I’m still using my timeline as a guide, I have strayed from it quite a bit.  I let the story take me where it wanted to go; it was flowing in a different direction than I planned on going, so I let it flow.  I let the story write itself.  Sometimes that’s the best thing you can do.  Let go, and stop being so controlling!  Let your characters help shape the story, you’d be surprised where it will end up.

I have been able to add so much to my novel by straying from the timeline of events for a while.  New characters formed, new groups, new settings, and new ideas.  Just the other night, I was ruminating on my novel, and a new idea came to me, an idea that fit perfectly and would punch up the ending!  It would actually help the story and give it a crackerjack new twist!  I was so excited.  Today I started writing that new bit of inspiration into the story, and it’s working out very well.  I’m please with it.  I haven’t finished with the new element yet, but I should be done adding it within the next day or two.

If you’re a writer, and you’re gripping too hard on your plans for your work, I suggest letting go a little.  I think it’s good to have plans, but there needs to be some wiggle room.  Sometimes your story just wants to go in a different direction, and if you force it to stay on the path you set up in advance, you may miss out on some treasures that your story wanted to dig up for you.  There’s my writing tip for the day.

Current word count for Deus Ex Machina: 56,114/50,000!

Until Thanksgiving,

Andrew Ronzino, General Knowledge

Now that I have 50,000+ words, I figured that I would treat you to another excerpt from my novel.  Just in case you missed them and want to go back and read them, the first one is here, and the second one is here.  The first two really focused in on Saul and Xandria, but this scene has Tanya in it too.

Again, please remember that this is a vomit draft, so it’ll have only enough editing to make it barely presentable.  Enjoy:

Saul was lying in the hospital bed with his arm in a sling. The last thing he wanted right now was to be in a bed with his arm in a sling, but there was nothing he could do about it. He had been in the hospital for nearly a day now.

When they brought him in, he was light headed from the loss of blood, and the doctors began to work on him right away. He accepted what they gave him to numb the pain, but it wasn’t enough to block all of the pain he felt as they dug into his arm to get the bullet out. But once they extracted it and stitched him he felt a lot better. It still hurt, but at least he knew he wasn’t going to bleed to death. The doctors told him he would be fine, but they wanted to keep him in the hospital for at least three days. He was also not allowed visitors until he was rested up.

Well, he felt rested up. He wanted to make sure Xandria was okay. She had been the one who’s life he saved when he took the bullet for her, the least they could do was let her in so he could talk to her.

On his way to the ambulance, he had passed Tanya Stentov who seemed to have something to do with the police rescue, but she wasn’t talking about it, and the ambulance wasn’t willing to let him wait there with a bullet wound. So he was forced to go to the hospital, get the bullet wound fixed up, and rest.

The food wasn’t half bad though. He had heard that hospital food was terrible, but he didn’t think it was all that awful. He rather liked it. He didn’t get as much as he wanted, but based on taste alone, it was good enough.

The doctor came walking in, looking at a chart of information. “Mr. Deus, how do you feel this morning?”

I feel fine, Doc.”

Good, let me have a look at that arm.” The doctor deftly removed Saul’s arm from the sling, which caused him to wince a little. He undid the bandage, the examined the wound. He replaced it with fresh bandages a nurse brought in. He helped Saul get it back into the sling. “The good news is that it’s healing fine. No sign of infection.”

That’s good,” Saul said. “When will I be able to get back to work, Doc?”

You should have full use of your arm in about a month.”

A month!”

Yes, and I don’t want your over exerting yourself during that time, Mr. Deus,” the doctor said calmly.

How am I supposed to get my work done?”

You will have to hold off on any kind of clockwork for now.

That’s like asking a bird not to fly, Doc.”

The doctor chuckled. “Yes, but a bird with a broken wing can’t fly until its healed anyway, Mr. Deus.”

Saul grumbled, but he knew the doctor was right, it looked like he would have to ask William Stone to cover him a bit longer.

You have a few visitors, do you wish to see them now?”

Saul sat up straight on his bed. “Yes! Finally!”

The doctor nodded and said, “I’ll send them right in. Rest, Mr. Deus. Don’t get too worked up.”

Saul didn’t answer. Maybe now he could see Xandria. He felt his stomach turn in anticipation. He only had to wait for a few minutes. Xandria and Tanya walked into the room, both smiling brightly at him. He smiled back at them, but his eyes remained only on his best friend.

How do you feel, Saul,” Xandria said.

I got shot, Xan, how do you think I feel?” He meant it as a joke, and he knew Xandria would know that, but Tanya’s eyes widened at the rude remark. “But other than the pain, the hole, and the loss of blood, I believe I’m okay. The doctor says I should be out of here within a few days. They just want to make sure an infection doesn’t set in.”

She smiled and bent down to give him one of those awkward your-in-a-bed hugs, but he didn’t complain at all.

How are you?” Saul asked.

I’m perfectly fine. I was a little shaken up during the whole shoot out, but I’m fine now. Thank you, by the way.”

Saul knew exactly why she was thanking him, but he wanted to hear her say it, so he played the part of the fool. “For what?”

You know what, you idiot. You saved my life in that warehouse.”

Saul smirked. “Oh that. Nah, I just jumped in front of a bullet for fun. It’s a hobby.”

Well, your ‘hobby’ saved my life. But seriously, Saul, I could have died. Thank you.”

Saul wasn’t ready to accept thanks for that. “You would have done the same for me, Xan.”

Truth!” she said. “In a heartbeat.”

Saul thought he better stop ignoring the only other person in the room. He looked up at Tanya. “You the one who brought the cops to rescue us?”

It was Tanya’s turn to smile. “I had a little something to do with that, yes.”

I think there’s a story here,” Saul said as he repositioned himself on the bed to be more upright and comfortable.

-Excerpt from Deus Ex Machina; Chapter 25, by Andrew Ronzino

And there it is!

Current word count for Deus Ex Machina: 54,800/50,000!

Until tomorrow,

Andrew Ronzino, The Guardian of Forever

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